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Temujin sure does get around, doesn't she?

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WHAT A TWIST!

posted by Salen on April 25th, 2018, 11:55 am



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Had no idea Temujin was a head-banger.
Well, I mean, I guess I knew she banged heads, but usually not her own.

posted by Marshal Banana (Guest) on April 25th, 2018, 3:30 pm



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Feels a little like the last panel would have more effect if the two just looked to each other with exclaimation marks over their head... no need to call out plot twist here.

posted by WhiskeyFur (Guest) on April 26th, 2018, 6:13 pm



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@Whiskey
Pointing out the similarity of their tactics to that of Leroy Jenkins could cause problems as well... we don't need to cause more unnecessary deaths...Although, given Temujin's choice of villianous allies I still think Cokehead could come back from whatever hole they put her in.

posted by Obvious<o.o> (Guest) on April 30th, 2018, 11:06 pm



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I was suggesting a slightly different way to tell the story without being genre savy, not what was said but the how.

Just an opinion, but it would make the two of them seem slightly more mature... again, just my opinion. Every storyteller tells the same story differently.

posted by WhiskeyFur (Guest) on May 1st, 2018, 10:34 am





 
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@WhiskeyFur: One of the issues as writer who works on a team with an artist is that I think of a story in terms of dialogue, the artist thinks visually. This means sometimes I write something that might be better depicted visually, but I can't always foresee how that will play out in advance.

posted by DarkwingDork on May 1st, 2018, 10:40 am



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@Salen: *Breaks M. Night Shymalan's neck* "What a twist!"

posted by Pendrake (Guest) on May 4th, 2018, 2:26 pm



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